A thorough response clearly expressing the progress you have made since you completed the preliminary task.
Re the first cut of your thriller which you have included. I would remove this unless you wish to evaluate the strengths and weaknesses of this cut.
You could say something like .... The lack of contrasting locations didn't allow for authenticity. Thus we decided to add extra footage of the runner in a recognisable situation doing the washing up in a kitchen with flash backs or a premonition to being hunted in the woods...This is what I learned from this first edit, that thrillers work best when they represent ordinary people doing recognisable chores with cuts to a desolate trackless forest where the boy doing the washing up is represented as prey. This use of opposing locations adds suspense and realism and visual appeal.
I also learned that the titles were unsophisticated and suggested a horror or action film, thus we modified the titles too ......
If you haven't time to do this then remove the first cut of your film completely from this question.
A thorough response clearly expressing the progress you have made since you completed the preliminary task.
ReplyDeleteRe the first cut of your thriller which you have included. I would remove this unless you wish to evaluate the strengths and weaknesses of this cut.
You could say something like .... The lack of contrasting locations didn't allow for authenticity. Thus we decided to add extra footage of the runner in a recognisable situation doing the washing up in a kitchen with flash backs or a premonition to being hunted in the woods...This is what I learned from this first edit, that thrillers work best when they represent ordinary people doing recognisable chores with cuts to a desolate trackless forest where the boy doing the washing up is represented as prey. This use of opposing locations adds suspense and realism and visual appeal.
I also learned that the titles were unsophisticated and suggested a horror or action film, thus we modified the titles too ......
If you haven't time to do this then remove the first cut of your film completely from this question.
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